Highlights from #FoodFictionFriday Assignment #2: Distillation

And… week 2 of #FoodFictionFriday is in the books. You guys are really finding your writing groove. As a reminder, the challenge was to use the principles of distillation to write and edit a piece describing a person as a drink.

Here are some highlights:

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“I am serious, this guy is a milkshake. At first you think he’s all sweet, creamy, wholesome, made from ice cream and strawberries and milk and shit. Then something happens when he gets agitated. Those tasty bits get all mixed together, they become icy cold, thick as concrete and give you a headache.” . . . #foodfictionfriday #writingchallenge

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This piece from @Boomboombbq read in such an effortless, uncontrived way. The drink metaphor was so natural, you’d think we all described people that way.

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Time for another #FoodFictionFriday! This week @jessica_tom told us to describe a person as a drink. There was obviously no other drink I could pick besides this one! So here it goes: He shimmers in any well-lit room with his silver jacket and bright red tie. When he greets you he will send shivers down your spine. He’s got a secret and if you listen closely you can hear the gurgles and pops of whatever is brewing inside. He’ll never tell you what he’s hiding. (Not even the key to staying healthier than his older brother) Instead, he will entertain you with sweet stories that roll off the tongue. He ends every conversation with a salty joke, or burn that leaves you craving for more.

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@Demewalls wrote a heartfelt yet unsentimental ode to one of the best drinks of all time. Don’t you want to be this guy’s best friend?

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Okay, this week’s #FoodFictionFriday was to use the principles of distillation to write a profile of a character as a drink. Yes, kind of a mouthful, but hope you had fun with it. 😉 ✏️ My piece started kind of amorphous, a little like it was trying too hard. Then I took out excessive “thats” and ideas that led to nowhere. Then I cut out words that sounded profound but were actually kinda cliche. Last, I listened to the rhythms of the sentences and moved words around so they landed with a punch. 👊#mineralwater #butnot ✏️ My writing teacher once told me that you need at least one knockout sentence per page. Now your turn -- hit me! (I know revision is part of this week’s theme, but if you look at it too much, you’ll start to hate it. Just post it!)

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And finally… here’s mine!

Keep on the lookout for the next prompt on this blog or on Instagram. The next assignment goes a little more outside the box. ;)